xanthan gum

alright since you asked for help, i'll try. not liking the intro first line. make it die. first stanza : just...add more. it was a great image - why don't ...

Sometimes the dizzying effect Spins me and the world In an ethereal difference of confusion The sum of all the efforts Blinding and contradicting each other To the blurry mix ...

you know, i saw that you were a novice and twelve years old (and bitterly recalled my poetry from two years ago) and i immediately assumed this poem would be ...

well, this was very much story-like and didn't really have anything but structure to define it as a "poem", per say. This was like a prose and even lacked poetic ...

i didn't get the point of the poem, really, except for the end. then again i'm multitasking the the maximum.... but i loved all your references to color, which relate ...

i love your drawing style. very good. go for more detail, though - your good at it.

this poems is rather cute, and rhymes, which is a rarity. it drifts a bit and certainly isn't award-worthy but i loved the meaning, the fluent-ness. and, well, actually - ...

I tried to add a bit of explination, as this was sort of "mid-story". It might not make it flow well, and for that I apologize. Nat ducked down below ...

this was cute and funny, despite lack of structure, rhythm, imagery, poetic style...er.... well, i'm not exactly sure it was even a poem but it kept my interest and i ...

i don't know you, but hey, i love you! (but just to tell you, toads don't exist. it's all a lie.)

the poem had good parts, but was relatively boring. it was sort of like this to me: good! boring boring good! boring boring boooooooringgggggg GOOD! boring ..good! haha. what i ...

wow this poem is really good. this first stanza hooked me, and it sort of faded a bit in the middle second stanza, but came back strong and clear and ...

a tad bit shallow, but passing and relatively true for any middle school drama. not much imagery, metaphors, etc. but just didn't strike me. it was rather appearance based which ...

I loved the imagery and, all in all, this is a really great poem. it held my attention from beginning to end, the ending, itself, was definitely worthy of the ...

I agree that the "Oh my God" was sort of dull, but all in all it was very creative. i didn't notice the HOME EMOH thing at all until it ...